I like your question. The question is related to everyday life. The information you wrote before the question and the video are useful for understanding and answering the question. The picture you added to the point on the map, relevant to the subject of the question. I suggest you to add some information about the picture (point on the map).

I added a new point on your map.

Good Luck! 

Hi Eilam,

The question you created is interesting, require a high cognitive level of thinking, written with no English mistakes and is related to our everyday life – production of fuel and other useable materials.

Here is my feedback:

·        The point on the map and the picture are relevant and has a strong connection to the question, but it should provide additional information that can help the student answer the question, and it should include an original movie, related to this extra information, and connects the question to the student’s everyday life. Your information point doesn’t include all that. My suggestion is to move the information you wrote about distillation from the question itself to the information point, add a little bit more information about crude oil distillation and its products, and create a short movie that shows the oil refineries in Haifa.

·        According to the assignment instructions the question should include a simulation or animation. You included a movie which is very nice, but in my opinion is too long.
I found the following nice animation/simulation which you might want to use:

http://www.abermandelek.com/howoil.html

·        The structure of a distillation tower is not really clear in your question. Personally I know and understand the general structure from my previous knowledge, but I think a 7-9^th grade student will find it hard to figure out if not illustrated and explained in more details. My suggestion is to include a better picture (like the one in the simulation I suggested or the one here: http://www.bbc.co.uk/schools/gcsebitesize/science/aqa_pre_2011/rocks/fuelsrev3.shtml for example..) and include it in the information point.

·        The question you asked about the distillation process requires high level of cognitive thinking, maybe even too high for young students. Consider asking a different question.

I added a point on the map which talks about a very basic and natural distillation process in nature – the evaporation of the sea saline water and the creation of rain drops which are actually distilled water.

Good Luck!

Alona